wednes | Who thinks these up?

I just got a rejection back for my short story, In the Closet. I daresay that along with Growlers it is one of my faves. They said it was "cute" but rambling. It's a tough call, because you could call my overall style somewhat rambling, but I think it works. This is especially true when you're talking about a first person story where the MC is insane. Then again, that may be why first person stories are NOT all the rage right now.
When I get criticisms of my work, I want to see how I can use them to improve. But in this case, I'm not sure how to go about it. Can I be less rambling without changing my whole style? Is my style too rambling in the first place? They only read one short story, after all...

Here's this thing, which entertained me briefly.

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I'm feeling quite a bit better, which is good since it's H's turn to be sick. He's better off than I was though, he is eating and sleeping at least. My sunglasses finally came in, and as soon as I feel well enough to get the bus to the mall, I'll be picking them up.

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That little doodad would be cool if you got to pick images that actually were from your own life instead of predefined ones.

I must agree.
Some of them were not really "me".

Ah, bummer about the rejection. I like the rambling.

One of the most difficult things for me when I get comments like that is to tell the difference between solid writing advice and personal opinion. I guess that's why it's so important to get plenty of input.

Thanks!

If that is the story that I think it is, I think the rambling helps define the character. As for the Visual DNA, they didn't have Diet Coke, so how could I possibly pick my drink?

I think so too. The so-called rambling gives you all the character's flavor. I use that style because I like when plot elements creepy up on people instead of being too blunt.

Yeah, the meme left a few important things out. Like "relaxing" did not offer the option of a TV.

You know, I have some hate for the lack of first-person-love flitting around. I LOVE writing and reading first person and one of the biggest reasons is because it allows one to ramble and be in a character's thoughts as a real person thinks. I'm a character junkie, so there's that. Still, I say screw 'em all! ;)

Sage advice!

I agree. The whole point of first person is to let you see all the aspects of a character, and not let him/her be defined by others.

My new story is a series of first person chapters so each character will get that voice.

Do you publish your writing here on the internets? I'd like to take a look at your ramblings. Fox

I do in fact.

wednes_writes

Anything not marked "novel slice" is a short story.

Here's the rambler in question:
http://community.livejournal.com/wednes_writes/6586.html?mode=reply

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